Hi Ethan, this is a nice Haiku, next time I think that you should get the dimensions a bit better so they fit inside the green box. I also think you should keep the sentence in one line, otherwise your Haiku is great!
Hey Ethan, I love your haiku, the words fit well, one thing to work on is that it would be easier to read it you had 1 sentence on the same line, but other then that, great haiku
Hey Ethan, Just remember that the third sentence has 5 syllables, you put 6. Come check out my blog at http://sssophiah.blogspot.co.nz/ Sophia Hasan-Stein.
Great, really enjoyed it. keep it up.
ReplyDeleteHi Ethan, this is a nice Haiku, next time I think that you should get the dimensions a bit better so they fit inside the green box. I also think you should keep the sentence in
ReplyDeleteone line, otherwise your Haiku is great!
Jordan
hi Ethan I love your Haiku the flow was nice. Amazing first haiku
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Hey Ethan,
ReplyDeleteI love your haiku, the words fit well, one thing to work on is that it would be easier to read it you had 1 sentence on the same line, but other then that, great haiku
Hey Ethan,
ReplyDeleteJust remember that the third sentence has 5 syllables, you put 6.
Come check out my blog at
http://sssophiah.blogspot.co.nz/
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